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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to leam this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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When talking about the ways of teaching children how to be good members of
society
, people's opinions
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divergen
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divergent
 on
such
 a controversial issue. In
this
 essay, I will present both sides of
this
 issue and conclude by giving my own point of view.
First
 and foremost, children growing up with their parents,
which
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is an important period that will change one person's perspective
to
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society
. To be more specific parents will do their best to give the environment which included a comprehensive view that kids could explore by themself and enhance their
ability
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.
As a result
, when children meet some problems or
feeling
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furstrating
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frustrating
frustration
, parents would be the best teacher who
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been
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experienced lots of challenges.
Furthermore
, the fact that school is a place
gather
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 plenty of
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 indicates that there must have teamwork projects or competitions. To be more specific, school is
same
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 as a little
society
, where the places need to rising your own ability to surpass the enemies. As result, the environment includes some challenges
would
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 be better to let
child
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the child
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growing
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 and
also
 closer to the future
society
. In conclusion,
although
 how teenagers learn the ability
of being
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good
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a good
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partner
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of
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society
 is
clearly
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thorny
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 issue, I would take
more
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balance
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 view. The reason is that both places would
faced
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the
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different problems, which we can't control or predicted.
Therefore
, I personally believe that families and schools could teach teenagers how to control themself in
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society
.
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