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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language
One of the most important issues around the world is a foreign
language
. Overseas
language
 creates dramatic
problems
such
 as social, and practical for those
people
 who want to stay in a different country.From my perspective, there are many reasons that I want to agree with
this
 statement, as I will outline below. Generally speaking, there are some serious reasons why
people
 think that it can create social
problems
, like cultural related.To be precise a foreigner can't properly cope with the new country's festivals without knowing the nation's
language
 properly. So, it can be difficult for him to understand.
In addition
,
people
 can see their communication
problems
, where they can not elucidate their thoughts to others.
For example
, if someone wants to hire accommodation for living is not able to give the proper information to help him
/
her.
This
 is because he
/
she is not familiar with the foreign
language
. despite these arguments, there are a few practical
problems
 that can happen to an overseas
language
person
.
Firstly
, he can not get a job.
This
 is because
,
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 most of the jobs are required their own nation's
language
 to understand
people
. A good illustration of the idea is that if a
person
 applies for a company, he or she may complete all the requirements except the
language
 requirement, which she
/
he doesn't have.
Secondly
, a
person
 who doesn't know the
language
then
 does not have a proper idea of how to behave with another
person
.
As a result
, he
/
she needs to get some idea of how to present good behaviour towards others. in conclusion,
this
 is a topic which is very relevant in our modern world. That said, I feel that
people
 need to be more anxious about foreign languages,
otherwise
 have to face lots of
problems
 when living in a new country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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