Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
In our
days, an increasing number of Change preposition
Our
people
with different diseases are using another types
of medicines, in the place of going to a doctor. I reckon Replace the adjective
another type
other types
this
is a negative development, which can lead to a lot of problems.
To begin
with, people
are conducted and influenced by a huge number of smear companies, which try to sell their products and to
make money. As a consequence, we use several Fix the infinitive
apply
number of
drugs, without being consulted by a specialist, and in Correct quantifier usage
apply
fact
these cause more health problems. Add a comma
,fact
For instance
, in different Correct your spelling
advertisements
advertisments
it is sad that the toothpaste "Add a comma
,advertisments
parodontax
" is used for gingival inflammation, but the fact is that only scaling might treat properly gingival sore. Correct your spelling
periodontal
Nevertheless
, that toothpaste is amazing as an additional treatment, but not the main one. However
, people
are influenced by that advertisments
, they buy Correct your spelling
advertisements
it
, and visit a dentist once in a blue moon when the condition of their teeth Correct pronoun usage
them
are
worse.
My take on Correct subject-verb agreement
is
this
, I
think it is a negative developmentAdd a missing verb
is I
,
because a well-skilled specialist is meant to help patientsRemove the comma
apply
,
because different types of medications have plenty of side effects, which might lead to unpleasant situations. Through thick and thin, if Remove the comma
apply
population
hadn't Add an article
the population
cured
by their selves, Add a missing verb
been cured
the
morbidity and even mortality wouldn't have increased considerably in our society. Correct article usage
apply
For example
, in Romania, patients come to a dentist when they real
have big problems, and it is too late to save that tooth, which will be extracted. Replace the word
really
Everytime
I hear the same thing, I used a lot of medication for Replace the word
Every time
may
toothache, but the drugs didn't help me anymore.
In a nutshell, Correct your spelling
my
government
should try to inform Add an article
the government
people
that the prevention of a disease it's a way better thing than the treatment. So, we might think about our health, and to
make a routine Fix the infinitive
apply
once
in six Change preposition
of once
month
to be consulted by a doctor.Change to a plural noun
months
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite