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Some people think that current environmental issues are global problems and should therefore be dealt with by the government while others believe that these problems can only be tackled by individuals. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #government #individuals
Some
people
 would argue that present environmental
problems
 are global and should be solved by the
government
 while others consider that naturally related
issues
 could only be solved by
people
. Solving ecological
problems
 by local citizens is a good solution due to residents' interest in tackling environmental disasters,
however
, I think that
this
 problem is able to be solved only by
government
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 because they could provide a lot of funding for that. On the one hand, solving natural
problems
 by identities is a good and quick solution.
In other words
,
people
 are interested in it because these
issues
 make them suffer,
for example
, from poor air quality or global warming, which have negative on their lives.
Moreover
, if all local citizens contributed to solving the problem, it would be quicker, rather than using another method.
For example
, in Pakistan was a high level of air pollution due to the heavy industry of medicine but almost all residents took part in order to close manufactures. Despite the fact that tackling these
problems
 by
people
 is a relevant and quick solution, my perspective is that it might not solve
problems
 rigorously.
On the other hand
, only
government
 is able to provide
a vast amounts
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 of money to solve these
issues
 forever. By funding for tackling
issues
. the
government
 gives a golden opportunity to deal with
issues
 rigorously. As an example, the top countries with the best ecological conditions are countries, which donate a lot of money to solve ecological
issues
such
 as Germany and other European countries. My opinion is that if
only
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government
 takes part in solving natural
issues
,
issues
 will be solved rigorously. In conclusion, while solving problem by identities is quick, tackling the same
problems
 by the
government
 is a much more relevant approach.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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