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These days, problems with pollution are becoming worse, particularly in large cities. What are the reasons for this and how can this be solved? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There are many types of environmental problems all over the world these days. Problems with pollution are
becoimg
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becoming
devestigated
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devastated
investigated
, particularly in urban areas.
This
 is because
number
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a number
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 of
population
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the population
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move
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moves
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 to urban areas and their
activities
 have
impact
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an impact
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 on the air or water. I am going to give details of my opinion and one of
answers
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the answers
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for
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 the
problem
 in
this
 essay. To commence with, many
people
 would prefer to live in large cities and the population increased year by year. Their
activities
 are related to the cause of pollution.
For instance
, if
large
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a large
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 number of
people
 use their private cars, they
emite
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emit
 tons of CO2 and
air
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the air
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 would be contaminated.
Furthermore
, they need
to
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more energy to burn their trash and tons of CO2 are emitted. More and more
amount
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 of CO2
are
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is
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 created to make
people
’s life comfortable. In order to solve the
problem
,
firstly
,
people
 should know how their daily
activities
 have
damage
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damaged
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 the environment.
Secondly
, they should prevent
the
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activities
which
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apply
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related to CO2 emission. Once they realize the seriousness
regarding to
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of
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the
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pollution, they will change their daily
activities
.
For instance
, they would use buses or trains for commuting
instead
 of their cars.
This
 can contribute to
reduce
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reducing
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 CO2 emission and there is a case in Canada
proved
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this
 can improve
air
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the air
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 contamination
problem
.
To conclude
, the reason
for
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why
polution
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pollution
 problems become worse
especially
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,especially
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 in urban areas is because more
people
 live
their
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there
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 and their
activities
 cause the
problem
. It can be solved by
changin
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changing
 their
activities
 from
CO2 emitted
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CO2-emitted
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activities
 to
environmental
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environmentally
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 friendly ones.
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