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From the last few decades, there has been an increase in international tourism. Some people think tourism is beneficial for local communities and should be engouraged. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Over the
last
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 few years, international
tourism
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 got promoted tremendously. There are some individuals who believe it is good for local
people
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. I strongly agree as I am inclined to believe that
tourism
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 plays a vital role in boosting the
country
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's economy
together with
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 helping local residents with small businesses.
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 will discuss the positive aspects of
tourism
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 and provide a logical conclusion .
To begin
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 with, the
country
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's economy depends on its
tourism
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 on a very large scale. If authorities put an effort into building up a place
that is
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 attractive to tourists, more
people
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 from all over the world will visit those places.
For instance
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, in Pakistan, Murree is one of the most fascinating tourist
spot
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 that has a chairlift as well.
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,
people
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 from different countries come to visit that place. Not only
they
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 visit, but they
also
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 try different things
such
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 as a ride on a chairlift.
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, it is
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 very helpful in supporting local communities. There are more job opportunities for many local
people
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.
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Also
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 locally residing
people
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 will get a chance to open up small businesses.
This
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also
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 helps the government economically.
for example
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, local
people
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 can open small restaurants, hotels, region-specific dresses etc. Tourists would be really attracted by these things as they would be able to see their culture. Local
people
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 will get a very good chance to reflect their culture through food and dressings.
To conclude
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 the aforementioned,
tourism
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 plays an important role in the
country
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's national income
as well as
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 it is a source of income for many locally residing
people
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.
Therefore
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, I strongly agree that
tourism
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 should be promoted in a
country
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.
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