The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
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The provided line graph denotes the
number
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of
visitors
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who travelled to a Caribbean
island
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and their choices of stay during the visit from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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, the total
number
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of travellers has increased over 7 years.
Besides
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, the lowest
number
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of
visitors
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was in 2010
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the highest from 2017. In 2010, one
million
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tourists visited the
island
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, and around 300,000 of them stayed on ships,
while
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the rest decided to stay on the
island
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.
However
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, in the next
year
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the total
number
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of lands side
visitors
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increased to 500000.
As a result
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, the total
number
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inclined to 1
million
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. In 2012, the
number
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of voyages reduced back to the lowest of around 0.4 and recovered back in 2013.
On the other hand
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number
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of travellers on the
island
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, increased and reached its highest of 1.5
million
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in 2013 and remained at the same level up until 2015. In the period 2015 and 2016, the total
number
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of tourists remained unchanged at 2.75
million
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.
Nevertheless
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, there was a slight drop in people who stayed on land which was around 1.25
million
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.
Finally
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, the total
number
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of travellers jumped to the highest of 3.5
million
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, because both
Island
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visitors
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and ship guests crossed significantly.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, island, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 8 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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