The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
The provided line graph denotes the
number
of
visitors
who travelled to a Caribbean
island
and their choices of stay during the visit from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
, the total
number
of travellers has increased over 7 years.
Besides
, the lowest
number
of
visitors
was in 2010
while
the highest from 2017. In 2010, one
million
tourists visited the
island
, and around 300,000 of them stayed on ships,
while
the rest decided to stay on the
island
.
However
, in the next
year
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the total
number
of lands side
visitors
increased to 500000.
As a result
, the total
number
inclined to 1
million
. In 2012, the
number
of voyages reduced back to the lowest of around 0.4 and recovered back in 2013.
On the other hand
number
of travellers on the
island
, increased and reached its highest of 1.5
million
in 2013 and remained at the same level up until 2015. In the period 2015 and 2016, the total
number
of tourists remained unchanged at 2.75
million
.
Nevertheless
, there was a slight drop in people who stayed on land which was around 1.25
million
.
Finally
, the total
number
of travellers jumped to the highest of 3.5
million
, because both
Island
visitors
and ship guests crossed significantly.
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