Some people believe that children should be banned from using their phones during the school day. Others believe that children should be allowed to use their phones. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There are those, who believe that

phones

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should be forbidden for

children

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, and there are those who oppose

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view.

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uncontrolled usage of

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devices could affect

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's health, I believe that the possible benefits of it outweigh the drawbacks, the latter statement appeals to me more. In

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day and age, almost every child has a phone,

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the fact that it is the easiest way for parents to contact them in the modern world.

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, younger ones are still developing, physically and mentally, and overwhelming stimulation could have negative implications for them.

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, there were experiments with rats, which showed that waves radiated by

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, slowed down the development of the brain,

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there is not enough evidence on how possibly it could influence

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. The second opinion is that

children

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should use their

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, and I could not agree more with

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idea. With new technology development, they not only learn how to use them correctly but

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become better at it than the previous generation, which is something natural to happen. By using their

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children

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could learn faster and consume much more information than in the past,

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that, they

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learn how to choose only important parts to memorise.

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, younger ones can communicate not only with their classmates.

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, numerous

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during playing online video games, communicate with their peers around the world, which helps them to be more tolerant and culturally developed in the future. In conclusion, I would like to point out that despite the fact that

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might be harmful to

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, in the modern world they become part of our daily routine and younger ones should

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have the opportunity to use them and benefit from them.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

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Distraction
Cyberbullying
Concentration
Emergency communication
Digital literacy
Educational resources
Social development
Self-regulation
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Socioeconomic status
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Screen time
Peer interaction
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