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Eventually , technology will solve the most important environmental problems the world face today. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
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 contemporary era,
technology
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 has increased at an alarming rate . It
is often argue
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 that
technology
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provide
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 various solutions for major environmental issues,
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 other believe that the invention of new devices is having a negative impact on the
environment
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 . In my opinion, I completely agree with the former statement .
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advanced
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technology
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 plays
an
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 crucial role in everyone's life. First and foremost is that
,
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 most companies and individuals are using paper
due to
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this
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 usage of
computer
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computers
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,
laptop
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 and
smart phones
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, where businesses are even sending their own bills, receipts and personal documents by
emails
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 to save both money and paper.
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 , the invention of
electrical
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cars
are
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 surely advantageous and helpful to solve International problems called air pollution .
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, a survey
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taken by the Time of USA newspaper , in America , in 2016, was that 84% of the majority
is
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a
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advance
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technology
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 to solve these issues .
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,
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 has
also
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 gave a bad effect on our
environment
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 .
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 , cutting of trees to construct new buildings , which
disturb
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 the nature of
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the environment
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environment
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environmental
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 cycle.
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, over
usages
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usage
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 of petrol and diesel
that
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create
the
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pollution
such
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 as noise population , which gives a negative impact on
human's
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 health.
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 ,
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the usages
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usages
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 of plastic , which is
non-recycled
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a non-recycled
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 product and
it
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is not absorbed by the soil. For illustrate, the
Time
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of
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New York newspaper, in
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, in 1017, was that modern
technology
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 has heightened from 64% to 87% in the past 7 years.
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 conclusion , after deliberating all the positive factors of
solve
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 the environmental problems .
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modern devices
has
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a
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numerous way to solve their daily life issues, Yet, it is
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 has a negative effect on
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environment
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the environment
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 and health.
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