The pie charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Oman and Spain in 2005 and projections for 2055.

The pie charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Oman and Spain in 2005 and projections for 2055.
The four pie charts provide information about the
population
ages in two countries -
Spain
and
Oman
in 2005 and
also
the prediction for 2055. There are 3 categories of ages (
children
,
adults
and elder
people
).
Overall
,
Oman
tends to be a country of mostly elder
people
with just a tiny percentage of
adults
in 2055,
while
Spain
, on the opposite, is going to have almost half of its
population
in the 15 to 59
years
gap. In 2005,
Oman
had an even number of elder
people
and
children
with 48 % each,
while
adults
were just 4% of the whole
population
. On the other side,
Spain
used to have an overwhelming majority of
people
over 60
years
old at 62%, citizens under 14
years
and between 15 and 59 were just over a third of the
population
, with 14 and 24 per cent respectively. In 2055,
Oman
will be more like
Spain
in the first year with 57% of elder
people
and 37% of
children
. The number of
adults
will not change significantly with only a 2% increase to 6% in total. Meanwhile,
Spain
will have a nearly similar number of
people
between 15 and 59 and
people
over 60
years
old, but the percentage of
children
will stay relatively low at 12% of the
population
.
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