Topic: many people use distance-learning programs to study at home, but some think that it cannot bring the same benefits of attending school, college or university. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
E-learning is well popular now especially, after the Covid pandemic. A few years ago very limited people used online learning wiring in the whole world.
However
, during the
SARS Cov - 2
Correct your spelling
SARS-CoV-2
infection, since the latter part of 2019, most of the cities,
as well as
villages were locked down and pupils were unable to go to schools, colleges or universities.
This
worst situation compelled institutes to start
e-Learning
Correct your spelling
e-learning
show examples
to continue the education of pupils beyond the lockdown. As it was compulsory to switch to online teaching and learning, not only the undergraduates but
also
the teachers adopted the new system in the initial period, whether they
like
Wrong verb form
liked
show examples
it or not. Later they realized that working from home or studying from home is quite easy and cheaper compared to going to institutions. The transportation cost and time were saved
due to
the new method of learning, which
lead
Wrong verb form
led
show examples
people to adopt online learning.
Due to
increased demand, a lot of the latest operating systems were introduced
such
as ZOOM and Teams.
However
, distance learning has several disadvantages compared to traditional teaching. Traditional teaching helps freshers to interact with each other and assists them
to share
Change preposition
in sharing
show examples
their thoughts and culture. Apart from book reading, schools and universities conduct several extracurricular activities
such
as sports, cultural events, oratory competitions and teachers' day celebrations. All these extra activities help freshers to develop good attitudes and mannerisms. Unfortunately,
non
Correct your spelling
none
show examples
of the benefits are available in online programmes.
Moreover
, non-physical methods of education totally depend on the
internet
Capitalize word
Internet
show examples
and technical materials. Technical errors and lack of internet coverage markedly affect the system and if a student misses a few minutes of teaching, he or she could not understand the rest of the lesson. On top of
this
, new research shows that many pupils have been addicted to online games and social media and some went to the extreme to
addict
Replace the word
addicted
show examples
to adultery content on the internet when they engage in e-learning. In summary, even though, the distance learning system provides some advantages it can not beat traditional teaching.
Submitted by nusairmsm on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow of the essay by using transition words and maintaining a clear sequence of ideas.
coherence cohesion
Ensure the introduction and conclusion clearly address the topic and provide an overview of the main points in the essay.
task achievement
Use specific and relevant examples to support your ideas.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: