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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework and households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework and households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph describes the modifications in the proportion of electrical appliances possessed in households and the number of
hours
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 spent by
people
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 per week in a particular country from 1920 to 2019 .
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 , it can be seen clearly that the percentage of residences with electrical appliances experienced an upward trend throughout a period of 99 years , and thanks to
this
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 , the number of
hours
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people
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 had to spend on doing household chores decreased significantly . Looking at the line graph for more detail , in 1920 , the washing machine was the most common device for every household, with exactly 40% in total compared to 30% of vacuum cleaners.These figures continued to increase till the end of the period , reaching almost 100% of and around 65% of washing machines. In 1920 , no families had a refrigerator in their homes,but
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 the data underwent an upsurge of 100% to become the widest
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machine thanks
 to all
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the
 machines brought by
people
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 99 years later .Thanks to all these machines , the number of time
people
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 had to allocate to do their housework\homework housework +homework ko có s fell sharply from 50
hours
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 in 1920 to approximately 10
hours
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 in 2019.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership of electrical appliances
  • steadily increased
  • dramatically decreased
  • correlating the rise
  • became common
  • households
  • prevalence
  • technological advancements
  • increased affordability
  • household chores
  • labor-saving devices
  • allocated for housework
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