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Countries with a long average working time are more economically successfull than those countries which do not have a long working time. To what extend you agree or disagree?

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Human resource is the backbone of the economy of any country in the world. It is controversial that number of working
time
 is the determinant of economic success.
This
 essay tries to elaborate on the truthfulness of the above statement.
To begin
 with, the period of working
extent
 is gradually reducing all over the world from 1960 to 2020
due to
 the introduction of machinery in industries and offices regardless of the economic status of countries. The number of working
time
 widely varies in different territories.
For example
, people in India work more than 2200 hours in a year,
whereas
, in Germany, annual working
extent
are
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 only 1300.
However
, the economical status of Germany is far higher compared to India.
In addition
 to
this
, I would like to highlight that the working
time
 in many developed nations
such
 as the USA, the UK, Switzerland and France is below 1500 hours per year. Meanwhile, the working communities in Myanmar and Bangladesh have to do their jobs for a longer period. These figures clearly show that the financial stability of any nation is not dependent on the
extent
 of work.
In contrast
, Office bearers,
as well as
 labours spend more
time
 in their office and factories even in some rich counties
such
 as Singapore and South Korea.
According to
 research evidence, economists explain that the financial strength of any nation is not only influenced by working
extent
 but
also
 by many other factors. The efficiency of the workforce, the stress-free mentality of employees and the salary paid to them are too contribute to deciding economic success. In conclusion, GDB and percapita are not mainly dependent on the period of working hours but are influenced by many factors.
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