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Band 8.5

You have recently read a book about a city you know well and found some incorrect information. Write a letter to the author. In your letter tell him/her of the incorrect information give him/her the correct information explain why they should correct it.

#book #city #information #author
Dear Mr. Henry, I am writing to you to inform you about some wrong data I found in the
book
 'Adventures in Kumarakom'. My name is Gloria and I am a resident in the
city
 of Kumarakom for the
last
 20 years. First of all, let me congratulate you on
this
 outstanding
book
; it was indeed a pleasure reading
this
 masterpiece.
However
, being an inhabitant of the
city
, I would like to notify you that the History part in Chapter 2 is not accurate. The
book
 describes the
city
 as originating during the reign of British rulers, but there is evidence that it existed well before
this
 period. In fact,
this
 incredible
city
 was built during the reign of renowned Emperor Kabir Shah in 1856. The remnants of the old
city
 were found during the time of the British and they renovated
this
 area into a form which we currently see. It would be great if you could add
this
 information to the
book
 so that the reader would have a complete reading experience. Conspicuously, the
book
 is an excellent presentation of Kumarakom's rich heritage and beauty with an expressive articulation which keeps anyone who likes reading to enjoy
this
book
 to the core. Would you kindly consider my recommendations? Thanks for your understanding! I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Gloria Mathew
Submitted by gloriasherin on

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coherence cohesion
The letter is well-organized, but you could enhance readability by using bullet points or sections for different points.
task achievement
Try to use more varied vocabulary to demonstrate your language proficiency in the task.
task achievement
The letter has a clear and polite tone, which is very suitable for a formal letter to an author.
coherence cohesion
You have structured your letter well, making it easy to follow your points and reasoning.
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