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The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The provided chart illustrates the percentages change in house
prices
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 in five different nations (USA, Spain, Japan, Germany and the UK) from 1990 to 2002 compared with the mean house
prices
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 in 1989.
Overall
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, in the first half of the decayed three cities should minus figures and in the second half, 4 cities reported positive figures.
Besides
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, the highest deviation was reported from London. During the first 5
years
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, the average cost of houses in Tokyo and London look
same
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the same
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 with approximately minus 7%.
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, New York accounted for 5% of a decrement compared to 1989.
However
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,
Madrid
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in Madrid
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 in Spain and Frankfurt in
Germany
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Germany's
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 houses' cost rose by roughly 2% and 3% respectively. In the
last
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 5
years
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 (1996-2002) New York's average house price climbed by 5% which was greater than Madrid and Frankfurt's
prices
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. Madrid maintained the price growth and reached around 4% in
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 period,
while
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 Tokyo showed -5% which was a growth
compare
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compared
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 to the first 5
years
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. Noticeably,
prices
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 of the houses in London increased dramatically by more than 10% which was the highest change in the decade.
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, Frankfurt residences' costs reduced to 2% in the
last
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 5
years
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words prices, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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