Some countries achieve international sports by building specialized facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development.

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Nowadays, most
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the
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people showing interest in
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and it's
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improving their
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as well as
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achieving medals. Many experts believe that Government should provide specialized
facilities
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to train top athletes rather than providing
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areas that
everyone
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can use. I totally argue
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a negative development. On the one hand, many
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people achieve international
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from specialized
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and
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also
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increases patriotism in juveniles.
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, to provide
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its need lots of fund to build
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stations. Many young groups started practising
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participating in
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sports
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a sports
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game
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games
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like the Olympics and it is undeniable that it will be helpful for them if there was
facility
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a facility
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that
everyone
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can use.
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, it is useful for
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sports
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buildings to improve
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and achieve international medals
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,
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helpful
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economically
it
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because it
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provides job opportunities.
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, built new specialized
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facilities facilities
but it will be used in various ways.
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,
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fund can be used in providing
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facilities
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to
everyone
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it will help to improve every person's
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and reduce
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health
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risks.
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, it is apparent that the tax is contributed by the community.
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,
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funding should be spent to improve people’s life.
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, if all the national resources are
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emphasis on athletes
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numerous
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the
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problem of citizens are ignored,
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would lead to
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strong opposition from the public, even affecting the security of the nation. In conclusion, the government should provide
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facilities
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for
everyone
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not only for top athletes. It will be solved any other problems with that fund.
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