Instead of training a few athletes to win medals at the Olympics, governments should spend the money on programmes encouraging the public to be active and stay healthy. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Governments should shift their focus from spending funds on training a small amount of elite Olympic athletes to

investing

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in programmes that promote a healthy lifestyle for the general public.

This

statement resonates completely with my views which will be

further

discussed in

this

essay.

Firstly

, it is well known that in the modern era

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humanity is experiencing a rising problem of obesity and,

consequently

, health issues. Yearly, billions of dollars are dedicated to world

sports

games and, I believe, the governments do not allocate enough resources to build more local recreational centres, gyms and green parks where people can exercise.

Such

neglect may lead to an

overall

decrease in the quality of life as it is well known that a sedentary lifestyle and a lack of physical activity cause early death.

Additionally

, a significant part of people who enjoy watching

sports

games might have an unhealthy lifestyle.

For example

, one of the traditions to watch

sports

while

drinking beer, which is an alcoholic drink known to be toxic to the body.

Secondly

although

the Olympics could be politically important for the countries to compete with each other by showing off their athletes' training capacity and the amount of wealth to spend on the event,

sports

might not be a subject of interest for every single citizen.

Thus

, for some individuals, the games may not mean anything and these people could have benefited from the money wasted in a different way. In conclusion, despite the fact that the Olympics might be significant for the nations, I think that too much funding goes towards athletes' training and, at the same time, not enough local

sports

and health facilities are built.

This

leads to an increased level of an unhealthy population who may not even enjoy or attend the Olympics.

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Grammatical Range: 7.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

reallocate
mass health improvement
national health issues
foster a sense of community
boost morale
lifestyle
public health programs
government’s commitment
national pride
Olympic success
physical activity
discovery of new talents
elite athletes
balanced approach
physical and mental health benefits
inspiring national pride
unity
elite sports
innovation
sports science and technology

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Instead of training a few athletes to win medals at the Olympics, governments should spend the money on programmes encouraging the public to be active and stay healthy. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Fully explain your ideas

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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Art classes, such as painting and drawing, are as important for children's development as other subjects, so it should be compulsory in high school. Do you agree or disagree?