Many people find it hard to balance their work with other part of their lives. What is the reason for this? How can this problem be overcome?

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of people have difficulties
in
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balancing their professions with
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lives. There are some reasons for it,
such
as electronic devices, work
responsibility
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responsibilities
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and so on.
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reasons and discuss the right solution to curb
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it. In regard
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the reasons
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this
case, the major reason
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losing our
balcance
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balance
is
due to
advance
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advances
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in smartphone development. Most of us find smartphones
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an addictive tools
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.
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,
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research, most of society today
spend
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four hours of their time with that gadget and it
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to be dangerous for their life balance.
Moreover
,
citizen
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citizens
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today have a lot of work responsibilities
such
as meeting deadlines, customer issues, complaints and more.
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, they don't have much time to enjoy
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their
beloved
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.
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to be true when most
of
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parents
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the parents
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today are willing to take their children to the
child care
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centre so that they
able
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to focus on their jobs. In spite of those
matter
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, there
are
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still some
solution
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as well. One way to overcome
this
issue is by going on vacation with family members or friends.
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might
helps
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in reducing stress and
depressions
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as well as
strenghten
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strengthen
the bonding between relatives.
For instance
, a study has shown that holiday activities increase positive energy and emotions.
Thus
, workers are more likely to work harder after receiving some rest from their own manager.
To conclude
, the reason
of
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this
misbalance
are
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due to
jobs
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responsibilities and distraction from gadgets.
Thus
, the best approach to deal with it
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to educate people about its damaging effect and for the government to implement a consultation program on society in the future.
Although
the problem is unlikely to be entirely eliminated in the short term, there are concrete steps to stop the effects it is having on current society.
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