It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (e.g. Dinosaur, dodos ...) There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is said that the extinction of wild

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natural phenomenon and individuals do not require to conserve them for any reason. I do disagree with it because it offers treatment for human illnesses, which

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has a major contribution to boosting the economy of a nation.

Wildlife

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is a medicine cabinet for humans since ancient times as medicinal properties that come from

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are very effective to treat human health disorders. Because humans and

animals

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may look different but at a physiological and anatomical level they are almost the same.

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is why some of the medicines used for

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have many same compositions which are used to develop medication for humans.

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, there are some differences too which are far outweighed by similarities.

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, Omega-3 acid ethyl esters are extracted from fish and used to lower bad forms of cholesterol; triglycerides in the human body. Another reason why fauna is imperative for mankind is that it significant part of economic growth for some countries. As it promotes tourism

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nations where

wildlife

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is secured by the government

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the

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. Since there are many

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who are fond of visiting wild sanctuaries

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and zoos. In

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way,

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plays a vital role in an individual's life by generating some revenue

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it makes

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ecstatic.

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people

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all around the globe often visit Amazon Forest to experience

wildlife

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that generates revenue abundantly.

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, I do not agree with

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phenomenon as

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has a remarkable effect on human beings

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its medicinal properties

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push economy upswing of the countries which are rich in various animal species. So,

people

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have a need to preserve the disappearance of fauna.

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