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Many people want to have a successful career and a happy family life both. What problems are involved in a career and family life? How to overcome such problems ?

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A successful career and a fulfilling family
life
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 are the desires of many adults but achieving both, simultaneously, is always a hard nut to crack because of the problems encountered in between. The purpose of
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 essay is to analyze those likely challenges and suggest possible solutions to them.
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, a successful family
life
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 entails raising healthy and responsible children and being available for
one
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's spouse to provide support in relevant areas. It
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 requires providing an enabling home environment which offers comfort and support to the person on a professional path. I believe an adult needs to maintain a balance between family and
work
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 because the money gained from a career field is highly needed in
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 to meet the financial requirements of a successful family. If an aspect is neglected or
one
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 fails to handle both areas optimally, the individual will be faced with two options: dealing with failure on
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 end of the bargain or breakdown of
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's health
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 the extreme pressures from the demands of family and
work
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. It is worth noting that succeeding in the world of
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 requires a dedication of time, patience, and the ability to withstand pressure among other traits and these are similar virtues needed to build a successful family
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.
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, investing
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's time in a preferred profession may require reporting to a job as early as 8am and
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 spending many hours per day at
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 in
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to conclude
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 daily tasks thoroughly;
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 will mean having to spend less time with family leading to haphazard operations in the home-front. To solve
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 problem,
one
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 needs to patiently opt for job opportunities that will allow them to
work
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 fewer hours in
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 to meet the demands of the home.
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 option has been viewed as a hard nut to crack considering the competition in the employment sector but I have carefully considered the ways of those who have chosen
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 approach and
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 common factor among them is giving attention to every detail. When a person has groomed himself or herself excellently in service delivery, it is easier for employers to accommodate their preferences with the assurance that perfection is attainable under the watch of
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 employees. Summarily, to tackle the problems associated with sustaining a successful family
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 and career,
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 needs to
work
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 fewer hours a day
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 still earning handsomely and achieve
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, he or she needs to invest in self-development in
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 to be considered absolutely relevant in a particular course field.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • prioritizing
  • burnout
  • strain
  • neglect
  • resentment
  • financial pressure
  • childcare
  • gender roles
  • societal expectations
  • flexible work arrangements
  • telecommuting
  • family-friendly policies
  • communication
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