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In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

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In some nations, obesity is getting popular among
people
 and their rate of
health
 and physical ability are declining. I believe the main reasons are overconsuming in eating fast food and low activity during the day, but some actions could be done to solve these issues. These days
people
 tend more to have unhealthy foods as a meal. Easy restaurant access can save time in modern life, so they turn to a common option. Overconsumption of junk foods with a high level of sugar and fat causes many physical problems,
such
 as obesity.
Apart from
this
, a low tendency to exercise is one of the main reasons
people
’s
health
 and fitness are in a critical situation. After long work hours, societies have less energy to work out. Sitting for long hours and avoiding outdoor activities among crowds makes them fat and increases the chance of an ailment. To tackle these measures, there are some ways in which
people
 will be more motivated to increase their
health
 levels.
First,
there should be some restaurants that serve healthy foods for those who are in a rush. Easy access to healthy prepared meals increases
people
’s enthusiasm for eating beneficial foodstuff. Having less unhealthy food improves
health
 and body shape.
Moreover
, increasing the sports facilities in every district is a way to encourage
people
 to exercise.
Due to
 loads of tasks,
people
 prefer the nearest sports club to them. When they reach their destination sooner, they might exercise more. In conclusion, obesity is a serious problem that many countries are facing.
Although
 there are many problems causing the situation, there are sufficient measures that can help to make the situation better.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • obesity
  • overweight
  • physical activity
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • exercise
  • unhealthy diet
  • fast food
  • urbanization
  • modernization
  • stress
  • awareness
  • education
  • government intervention
  • policies
  • promotion
  • sports
  • fitness programs
  • health education
  • taxation
  • public transportation
  • infrastructure
  • parks
  • recreational spaces
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