Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependant on each other, while others think that people have become more independent. Discuss and give your own opinion.

While
some say that in the present
times
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we can't do everything alone but we need help,
on the other
hand
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it is thought that society has more freedom in acting alone. In my, opinion humans don't need another one to know something or to do what they want.
This
essay will discuss both views. Those who argue that people rely on people usually because of a simple fact
such
as family,
for example
in the USA member of a family who is between the group age 20-30 years old are still treated as children and their parents pay everything for them and let them live in the same house,
in contrast
to Japan who is forced to live alone in another house. Another reason is that we need someone who produces coffee and
also
scientist, doctors, economist, psychologists etc for our health and daily routine.
On the other hand
,
as a consequence
of artificial intelligence advancement and technological devices every task and knowledge can be accessed with just one click leading us to be smarter and less lean on others.
Nevertheless
, folk
also
somewhat become independent regarding their personal lives. Young people are more self-sufficient than their former generation since they can settle down on themselves at a pretty young age.
Furthermore
, as globalization grows apace with burgeoning employment prospects, youngers probably sustain themselves financially without subsidies from their parents. All things considered, I support the idea, claiming that populations are more independent from each other, but are getting more dependent on electronic devices.
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