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goverments should spend money on railways rather than roads. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#goverments #money #railways #roads
It is proposed that
railway
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 should be financed by governments
instead
 of
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the road
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road
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. I totally agree with
this
 Idea. There are many reasons for
this
 selection two the most important of which are less environmental impact and faster way of transportation. Global warming is threatening the planet and
automobils
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automobiles
automobile
 are the main source of greenhouse gases that pollute the atmosphere. Trains
specially
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 electric ones have
smaller
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a smaller
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 carbon
foot print
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 than their road goer peers;
moreover
, they carry more passengers or cargo per occupied area of land so
less
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 forests and natural
habitat
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habitats
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 would be destroyed by building railways. It is platable for passengers to arrive
as
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 fast as possible
to
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 their destination;
therefore
, they would choose the fastest means of transportation for reaching
to
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their destination. The cutting-edge technologies
which
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use
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 in high-velocity electrical
train
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trains
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 lead to
average
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an average
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 speed
more
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of more
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 than 250
kilo meters
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kilometres
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 per hour
while
fastest
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the fastest
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 highways in the world have speed
limitation
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 which
have
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 been set to 130
kilo meters
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kilometres
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 per hour. It is claimed that travelling
with
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 train has less freedom compare with cars;
however
, it can be compensated by developing local
poblic
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public
 transportation
such
 as subways and trams. All in all, allocating
public
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 budget
on
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to
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 railways
in
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is
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 a rational way of spending public financial resources of government because trains that use railways are greener and faster than cars, buses, and trucks that commute on roads.
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