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goverments should spend money on railways rather than roads. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#goverments #money #railways #roads
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It is proposed that
railway
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railways
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 should be financed by governments
instead
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 of
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the road
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road
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roads
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. I totally agree with
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 Idea. There are many reasons for
this
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 selection two the most important of which are less environmental impact and faster way of transportation. Global warming is threatening the planet and
automobils
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automobiles
automobile
 are the main source of greenhouse gases that pollute the atmosphere. Trains
specially
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 electric ones have
smaller
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a smaller
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 carbon
foot print
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footprint
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 than their road goer peers;
moreover
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, they carry more passengers or cargo per occupied area of land so
less
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 forests and natural
habitat
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habitats
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 would be destroyed by building railways. It is platable for passengers to arrive
as
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 fast as possible
to
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at
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 their destination;
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, they would choose the fastest means of transportation for reaching
to
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their destination. The cutting-edge technologies
which
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use
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 in high-velocity electrical
train
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trains
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 lead to
average
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an average
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 speed
more
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of more
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 than 250
kilo meters
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kilometres
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 per hour
while
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fastest
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the fastest
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 highways in the world have speed
limitation
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limits
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 which
have
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 been set to 130
kilo meters
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kilometres
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 per hour. It is claimed that travelling
with
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 train has less freedom compare with cars;
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, it can be compensated by developing local
poblic
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public
 transportation
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 as subways and trams. All in all, allocating
public
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the public
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 budget
on
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to
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 railways
in
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is
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 a rational way of spending public financial resources of government because trains that use railways are greener and faster than cars, buses, and trucks that commute on roads.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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