The table gives information about Underground Railroad networks in six big cities regarding when they were opened, the size and the number of users annually
The table compares different
products
, which were exported from Hong Kong over a 1-year period, from 2009 to 2010. The units are measured in Hong Kong dollars
.
Overall
, it is clear that
throughout the period given, the
export sales saw a considerable increase, apart from clothing and manufacturing goods.
Three Correct article usage
apply
products
registered an upward trend in export within a year. The changes of
metals Change preposition
in
was
the highest among others, at 122%, from 2.3 to 5.1 Change the verb form
were
billion
HK
dollars
, while
the figure for exporting equipment showed the lowest percentage of change, with 13%. However
, the latter one had been the most exported product back in 2009. Exporting telecommunication was also
the most popular product being exported which
followed by metals, and their percentages increased to 61 and 122 % respectively.
The proportion of changes in the exports of remaining Correct pronoun usage
apply
products
saw a decrease. In 2009, by exporting clothes, 6 billion
HK
dollars
had been earned. The next year, in contrast
, this
product became one of the least favorable
ones, making 1 Change the spelling
favourable
billion
HK
dollars
less. Similarly
, manufacturing products
also
followed the same pattern, having made 5.5 billion
HK
dollars
in 2009, and in 2010, its figure dropped to 4 billion
HK
dollars
.
In total, the profit made by exporting these products
was of
20 %, from 32 to 38.4 Change preposition
apply
billion
HK
dollars
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Vocabulary: Replace the words products, dollars, billion, hk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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