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some people think that social networking apps are beneficial for society, other people think that it has a bad impact on society. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, social media is becoming increasingly popular.
This
 has led to an argument about whether it has a positive or negative effect on our world.
This
 essay will discuss both sides and I will give my own opinion. On one side, there are several benefits of using social media.
Firstly
, these applications connect
people
 from all parts of the world with each other.
This
 has offered us the advantage of meeting different
people
 without even living own homes.
For example
, a few decades ago we have to travel overseas and spend a huge amount of money to experience new cultures or meet new
people
 from different backgrounds, but today we can do
this
 just by downloading an app on our smartphone.
Secondly
, family members can keep in touch with each other even if they are separated by hundreds of miles, thanks to networking apps.
This
 has affected positively our social lives. On the other side, network applications have a couple of negative effects on our world. These apps convince
people
 to stay at home as they can interfere with others without the need to meet in face-to-face conversations.
This
 change harms the development of
people
's social skills. To illustrate
this
,
people
 usually gain social skills by interfering with others, especially, face-to-face conversion and since there are not practising
this
 enough these days because of
this
 technology.
As a result
, they could not develop vital skills. The effect of social media on our lives is causing a discussion.
While
 some
people
 argue that
this
 tech has harmed us, I believe that the benefits outweigh the drawbacks.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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