Some people think that books should be stopped in schools and that, videos, films and computers should be used instead. To what extent do you agree?
Lately, a plethora of topics are being seriously talked about among various individuals and groups, and one prominent topic is
education
. There are even observers who believe that electronic products should applied for teaching educational organisations instead
of physical books
. I strongly agree with the suggestion, in the succeeding paragraphs, I am going to discuss my perspective further
.
The first point to emphasise is that multimedia courseware is an inevitable pattern for the future. It is a common fact that the natural environment can be protected by e-learning. To illustrate, we all know that peppers are made of trees, according to
the related organization reported there have a large number of trees are chopped for the purpose of making books
education
every single year, furthermore
, causing desertification in forests. Hence
, sustainable development can be achieved by online teaching instead
of physical books
.
Another idea worth stressing is that electronic teaching can provoke curiosity in children. The reason is that digital resources are very easy and very vivid to learn. For example
, my teacher in primary school always broadcasted the TV program Discovery to explain biologies, and I have never felt bored in this
class, since the video was successful in attracting my eyes as compared to reading books
. Moreover
, the relevant knowledge is difficult to forget, and easily comprehend and remember.
In conclusion, multimedia equipment replacing physical tools applied in education
is inescapable in the future. On the other hand
, vivid learning in education
is easy to keep in mind for children.Submitted by rosolook on
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Task Achievement
Explore both sides of the argument to provide a more balanced view. This will help in fully responding to the prompt and showing a wider range of language abilities.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use a broader range of linking words and phrases to help with the flow of the essay. This includes not just 'firstly' and 'another' but also contrastive connectors such as 'however' and concessive phrases like 'although'.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to include more varied sentence structures and punctuation to enhance readability and interest. Complex sentences and appropriate comma use can make a big difference.
Task Achievement
Incorporate more specific, real-world examples to support your points. While the Discovery channel example is good, adding more detailed scenarios or data can strengthen your argument.