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Some people fail in school , but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case ? What is the most important thing to succeed in life? (TYPE 5 – TWO PART QUESTİONS )

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There are some , who lose in academics
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 but had great achievements in the future. I believe that it is because of the hardworking and special skills embodied with them ,
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 the the valuable thing to overcome in life is patience and
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given to them by birth. Even though they will not be keen
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systemic schooling and structured education,
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, Thomas Alva Edison was a loser in his school,but later he became the father of major inventions. Apart from that, the willingness to do
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life will help to overcome
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failure. To illustrate, the effort which they are taking to tackle the problems and
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 out the weak points and
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 hard to overcome the difficulties is a key point to success. On the other hand, to be more fruitful in life , we have to be more patient to achieve victory. To illustrate, when there is a failure, most
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people will become depressed and hesitate to be optimistic.
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, they are not ready to wait for the next chance, in ,fact they quit the situation very quickly.
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regular
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success ,which is like the saying '
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. The vigours learning and earning experience by doing workouts will help the man to achieve success .
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,after the crash of several spacecraft, NASA could send the first human to the moon In conclusion,people who failed in classrooms reached high positions because of their talents and hard work.
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 to become successful , patience to wait for
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 opportunity and regular
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  • networking
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  • real-world application
  • career advancement
  • drive
  • motivation
  • life-long learning
  • opportunities
  • non-traditional paths
  • adaptability
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