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Advanced medical treatments are generally expensive. People’s access to proper health care should not depend up on their level of income. All people have the right to access the best medicine available. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience

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In current society,
due to
 the innovation of medical
treatment
 which is costly, citizens should obtain suitable
health
care
 despite their financial status,
thus
, I agree with the viewpoint that all people have equal access to the top cure available. There should be no discrimination when it comes to well-being
treatment
 among citizens since they are all paying taxes to their country whether they are wealthy or not.
For instance
, there are a lot of public who are not given proper medication since they can't
afford
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, which actually leads them to longer recovery worst is they stay untreated which keeps them in and out of the hospital,
while
 others can have the best
treatment
 they could imagine.
Nevertheless
, citizens must have equal rights no matter what is their position in life. It is
also
 difficult to give all responsibility to the governments, each one must be responsible enough to take
care
 of their fitness,
for example
, if there is free access to all the treatments and medicine, the crowd will likely be more careless about being fit and healthy since free medical facilities are well-taking
care
 off by the authorities.
Therefore
, the government should raise funds to support the indigents who are worthy of
treatment
 and encourage poor people to pay for their
health
 insurance. In conclusion, all people should be entitled to equal rights to all
health
care
 available in their own country with proper measures that they should not take the free medical treatments for granted, on top of that, they should be
also
 responsible for their own
health
 by eating healthy and exercising.
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