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The graph gives information about the number of books which were borrowed from four village libraries namely West Eaton, Ryeslip, Sutton Wood and Church Mount from June until September in 2014, and the pie chart shows a breakdown of kinds of book borrowed during the period.

The graph gives information about the number of books which were borrowed from four village libraries namely West Eaton, Ryeslip, Sutton Wood and Church Mount from June until September in 2014, and the pie chart shows a breakdown of kinds of book borrowed during the period.
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The graph gives information about the number of
books
 which were borrowed from four village libraries namely West Eaton, Ryeslip, Sutton Wood and Church Mount from June until September
in
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2014, and the pie chart shows a breakdown of
kinds
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the kinds
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 of
book
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books
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 borrowed during the period. From the line
graph
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 we can see that Sutton Wood shows
the
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an
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 upward trend compared with Ryeslip.
While
 West Eaton and Church Mount demonstrate
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a gradually
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gradually
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 rise over the period. The percentage of fiction
books
 was much higher in comparison with other types of
books
. Regarding
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Sutton
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 Wood started at almost 250
books
 in June and it rose slightly and
then
 the number of
books
 dipped in August, with approximately 100
books
.
By contrast
, there was a sharp fall in the number of
books
 in Ryeslip over the period of 4 months.
Moreover
, the figures for West Eaton and Church Mount showed
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a steadily
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steadily
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 increase, starting with around 50 in June and
reached
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reaching
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 150
books
 in September. Meanwhile, the rate of fiction
,
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 represented 43 per cent, and other types of
books
 had
similarly
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 percentages. The figure for biography is just 19%, and
other
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for other
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 genres of
books
 namely self-help, history and science, it was a small minority.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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