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The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities.
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The diagram illustrates the average temperature from January to December and the number of
hours
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 of sunshine in
London
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, New
York
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 and
Sydney
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 per year. The measurement is given by the hour.
Overall
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, New
York
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 was in the first rank for the cities with the highest annual
hours
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 of sunshine.
While
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 Lonon
in
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 the third rank.
In addition
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,
London
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 and
Sydney
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 have the brightest hour in July,
whereas
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, New
York
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 on January to March. To start with,
London
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 and
Sydney
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 trends were increasing gradually from April to July and started decreasing from August to December. These two cities have the same highest peak in July, between 20 and 25, respectively.
Moreover
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, New
York
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's temperature was stable, with 25
hours
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 of sunshine from January to March and hit its lowest in July with only slightly above 15
hours
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. Even though,
London
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 and
Sydney
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 have 5 and 10
hours
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 respectively for the lowest sun
hours
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, london, york, sydney with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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