The pie chart shows the main reason why agricultural land becomes less productive.

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The pie chart illustrates the reasons for land being less

cultivative

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cultivated

cultivation

for agricultural purposes . Meanwhile, the table shows how these affected the three different regions in the year 1990.

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, it is clear from the chart that,the over-grazing is the main reason for soil degradation. At the same time, the data makes it clear that Europe is the most pompous of it.

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, over-grazing

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for 35% in 1990 followed by deforestation with no less than 30%.

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, it is normal to cut down trees.

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, it is mandatory to plant another

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absent in

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data. The next reason is over-cultivation which is only 2% less than deforestation and the others are about 7%.

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, Europe is the region with the highest percentage 23 and Oceania with 13%.

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, North America is the one with the least ratio.

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, Europe has an

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majority .Oceania accounts for 0% of over-cultivation.

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Lexical resource: 6.0

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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The pie chart shows the main reason why agricultural land becomes less productive.

It is possible that children will learn by computers or robots in the future. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development

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