The pie chart shows the main reason why agricultural land becomes less productive.

The pie chart shows the main reason why agricultural land becomes less productive.
The pie chart illustrates the reasons for land being less
cultivative
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cultivated
cultivation
for agricultural purposes . Meanwhile, the table shows how these affected the three different regions in the year 1990.
Overall
, it is clear from the chart that,the over-grazing is the main reason for soil degradation. At the same time, the data makes it clear that Europe is the most pompous of it.
Firstly
, over-grazing
account
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for 35% in 1990 followed by deforestation with no less than 30%.
However
, it is normal to cut down trees.
Although
, it is mandatory to plant another
instead
that is
absent in
this
data. The next reason is over-cultivation which is only 2% less than deforestation and the others are about 7%.
Secondly
, Europe is the region with the highest percentage 23 and Oceania with 13%.
Moreover
, North America is the one with the least ratio.
However
, Europe has an
overall
majority .Oceania accounts for 0% of over-cultivation.
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