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Some people say that the avdertisement is extremely sucessful at perduading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that they no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is often considered by most individuals that in
this
 modern era, the advertisement of
products
 can be very effective which could lead them to spend
money
 on the same.
While
 others opine that
advertisements
, these
days
 are very common and can not change their mind to buy
things
.
This
 essay will discuss both viewpoints and I strongly believe that
advertisements
 are attractive and can attract
people
 easily to buy
things
. To commence with, the humans who believe that
advertisements
 of
things
 are common these
days
 and can not compel them to buy the same is because
people
 these
days
 are aware of how famous brands tend to display their expensive
products
 on different media platforms to make more
money
.
For instance
, research conducted in New Delhi, India showed that the famous shampoo brand named "Lux" tried to sell their shampoo by doing great
advertisements
.
On the other hand
,
people
 were aware of the dangerous chemicals present in that shampoo.
Hence
, no one bought it.
As a result
,
advertisements
 are very common these
days
,
people
 buy
things
 only when they need them or when they find them suitable for them.
However
, I strongly believe that
advertisements
 for famous brands attract
people
 and they tend to buy more
things
. To explain, these
days
 individuals are very conscious about their health
as well as
 their skin. Whenever they watch different skin brands advertising their
products
 on the media, they try to follow them and spend a huge amount of
money
 buying these.
Similarly
, humans are consuming various protein powders available in the market just by watching their
advertisements
. To exemplify, a survey conducted in the USA (United States of America) on a banned protein powder
due to
 its negative effects on the body, revealed that 60 per cent of the population bought it after watching it on television. In
this
 way,
advertisements
 of
things
 attract
people
 to buy them. In conclusion, some individuals have thought that
advertisements
 do not persuade them to buy
things
 in the market unless they need them, I strongly believe that even these
days
people
 get attracted by
advertisements
 and spend more
money
 to buy the
products
.
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