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Writing Samples
Band 6

A friend from another country is moving to your city for work. He/she has asked you for advice about living in your city. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • Suggest an interesting part of the city to live in • Describe the public transport in your city • Say how your friend can meet new people there

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Dear Sara, How have you been? I miss the wonderful time we had together in the dormitory. I
got
Verb problem
was

There may be a verb use issue here.

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 very happy when I found out you are coming to our
city
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

. It has a lot of interesting places and wonderful sightseeing. I bet you would fall in love with these locations. In my opinion, Takhti
street
Capitalize word
Street

The word street should be capitalized in this context.

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 is the best place for accommodation.
This
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 is located
at
Change preposition
in

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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 a lively and upbeat atmosphere.
In addition
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, various recreation facilities,
such
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 as a pool, a tennis court, and a cinema have been offered by
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 location.
Moreover
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, our
city
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 has access to an efficient and beneficial
a
Correct article usage
apply

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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public transport system.
This
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 system consists of buses, trams and taxis which
covered
Wrong verb form
cover

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb covered. Consider changing it.

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 all
part
Fix the agreement mistake
parts

It seems that part may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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 of the
city
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 during the day. Unfortunately, the bus and the taxi aren’t available at night, so you should use
tram
Correct article usage
the tram

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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 during the night. If you want to know about their fares and timetables precisely, you can ask
from
Change preposition
apply

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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the staff
in
Change preposition
at

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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 the stations. Most people in our
city
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 are very
kind hearted
Add a hyphen
kind-hearted

It seems that kind hearted is missing a hyphen. Consider adding the hyphen(s).

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 and have a sense of hospitality. You may not have any problem if you want to communicate with them. In order to
meeting
Change the verb
meet

It appears that the verb meeting should be in the base form as part of the to-infinitive following In order. Consider changing the verb form.

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 new people you can join
in
Change preposition
apply

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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different social and
sport
Change the noun form
sports

It appears that the noun sport is being used as an adjective, but you may have chosen incorrectly between the singular and plural form. Consider changing the noun form.

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 clubs that
are existed
Wrong verb form
exist

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb are existed. Consider changing it.

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 in the
city
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

. It would be a blast! I am looking forward to receiving a
kindly
Replace the word
kind

The word kindly doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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 message from you. Love, Mahshid

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While the response is complete and well-structured, consider breaking down sentences for clarity. This can enhance readability and ensure that each point is easy to follow.
coherence cohesion
Be mindful of small grammatical errors and typos, such as 'a bus and the taxi aren’t available at night' and 'ask from the staff'. Improving these will raise your score.
task achievement
The letter covers all required points: suggesting an interesting part of the city, describing the public transport, and explaining how to meet new people. This demonstrates a clear understanding of the task.
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The tone of the letter is welcoming and friendly, which is appropriate for writing to a friend. This makes the letter engaging and personable.
coherence cohesion
The letter follows a logical structure with a clear opening, body, and closing. This makes it easy to read and understand.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph addresses a single idea, maintaining clarity and focus throughout the letter.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are well-crafted, adding a personal touch to the letter.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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