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Some people think that children should be involved in any kind of sport while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #children #sport
Sport
 is very important for
children
.It,s plays
imperative
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 role in the life of
children
.
sport
 makes good health of
childern
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children
 and they stay healthy and strong,
sport
 gives them strength and they live active. Like both
people
 say that
Sport
 is a good thing and both say not
good
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a good
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 thing different
people
 have different
thought
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thoughts
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 or
opinion
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opinions
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, because they have
own
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their own
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 experience or experiments on that baise they put out
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a result
the result
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result
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results
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 that
sport
 is good or not good. like some
people
 to much favour of ,
sport
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a sport
the sport
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 they want school and nursery should have
compulsory
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a compulsory
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 period of
sport
, in another hand some
people
 want
sport
 is not necessary any field
of
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,it is a
waist
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waste
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 of time its better than
children
 gives time to study I think
game
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the game
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 gives an important lesson to
children
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about
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how can we achieve our target ,and they know how we win and celebrate our achievements and when they lose
some
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apply
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how to bear other achievements
that
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which
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 is the best thing for
children
. Conclusion
sport
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Sport
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 is the best thing for
children
,in
this
 ,way
children
 live mentally strong and healthy and feel fresh and happy .
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