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The quality of life in some big cities is becoming worse every year. What is the main cause of this problem? What solution could you suggest?

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It is becoming more and more evident that living conditions in some megalopolises have started to be inferior gradually.
This
 essay intends to describe the major cause of that and suggests some measures to elevate the problem.
To begin
 with, advancement in technology has led to a rise in the number of vehicles on roads and it, in turn, created a serious issue concerning traffic congestion. Naturally,
this
 will emerge certain inconveniences for all sorts of citizens including the ones who commute to their workplaces, university students and even school children. They might have to spend a vast amount of time on their way to their destination. Since the introduction of assembly lines in the manufacturing of cars by Henry Ford, the prices of vehicles have seen a moderate decline,
in contrast
, the average income of the population has increased significantly.
As a result
, the aforementioned complication has appeared. As for an appropriate suggestion, an adequate step that has to be taken to tackle
this
 issue can be encouraging people to use public transportation rather than their private cars by applying higher standards to transport
such
 as buses and trains. Once commuters find travelling by communal services satisfying, they may automatically choose them over their private cars.
Moreover
, there are fewer and fewer parking spaces in big cities which can be one more reason to switch to communal transportation. Taking everything into account, the trouble that has been caused by the technological revolution can be resolved by modernizing existing means of transport that are being used for commuter transit so that passengers could feel more comfortable throughout their journeys.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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