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Technology is becoming progressively universal. In the fullness of time. The classroom will be totally substituted for technology. Do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 contemporary world,
technology
 is becoming more and more advanced by the day and
classrooms
 are one of the places that benefit and enjoy it. I slightly disagree with the fact that artificial intelligence will take over
classrooms
. Analyzing the disability of disciplining classroom
teachers
 for
technology
.
additionally
, the limitation of the learning process of students will prove
this
. There are many reasons to argue that robotic
teachers
 made with artificial intelligence will bereft of control over
classrooms
.
For instance
, It's apparent to know that a teacher with teaching skills would easily take control of a classroom but yet a robot teacher can't perform
this
 task.
Moreover
, a robot teacher would not be able to connect with scholars emotionally.
On the other hand
, robot
teachers
 would be able to provide more information and examples for pupils.
This
 is a quality that many
teachers
 don't have.
Moreover
, Schools and Universities would benefit financially. On top of that, motivation and discipline are critical keystones in the educational procedure.
This
 is certainly true for students who need sensitive approaches. As aforementioned, robotic
teachers
 would not have the emotional understanding of a student which would make many of them unmotivated to learn.
Furthermore
, most
classrooms
 nowadays are using laptops and computers
instead
 of books in class which is most common in America.
This
 is becoming a distraction for most students in
classrooms
 and it's having a negative effect on them.
To conclude
,
although
 some people would prefer
technology
 to have a strong influence on
classrooms
 many would disagree for the reasons I have previously mentioned it's safe to say that
technology
 like robotic
teachers
 and electronic devices will never substitute
classrooms
.
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