Some people believe holding sports events are too expensive, such as olympic games,and the world cup. But others think in opponent way. Discuss both opinion, and give your own view.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that all points in the introduction are clearly reflected in the body paragraphs, maintaining consistency throughout the essay.
Task Achievement
While the essay provides a good range of ideas, they could be made more comprehensive by slightly expanding on each point to fully develop the argument.
Introduction and Conclusion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main ideas, but try to include a more explicit final opinion on the impact of hosting large sports events.
Introduction and Conclusion
The essay effectively introduces both perspectives and provides a balanced discussion.
Task Achievement
Examples provided, such as financial investments in Qatar and Brazil, are relevant and add depth to the argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay follows a logical structure, starting with an introduction, followed by argument presentation, and concluding with a personal view.
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