Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

In today's world,
People
have different views about whether we are more or less dependent on others. In my view, modern life forces us to be more independent than
people
were in the past. There are two main reasons why it could be argued that we are more dependent on each other now.
Firstly
, life is more complex and difficult, especially because the cost of living has increased so dramatically.
For example
, young adults tend to rely on their parents for help when buying a house. Property prices are higher than ever, and without ,help it would be impossible for many
people
to pay a deposit and a mortgage.
Secondly
,
people
seem to be more ambitious nowadays, and they want a better quality of life for their families.
This
means that both parents usually need to work full-time, and they depend on support from grandparents and babysitters for child care.
However
, I would agree with those who believe that
people
are more independent these days. In most countries, families are becoming smaller and more dispersed, which means that
people
cannot count on relatives as much as they used to. We
also
have more freedom to travel and live far away from our hometowns.
For example
, many students choose to study abroad
instead
of going to their local university, and
this
experience makes them more independent as they learn to live alone. Another factor in
this
growing independence is technology, which allows us to work alone and from any part of the world. In conclusion,
while
there are some reasons to believe that
people
now depend on each other more, my own view is that we are more independent than ever.
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Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interdependence
  • globalization
  • technological advancements
  • collective action
  • digital evolution
  • minimal reliance
  • direct interaction
  • empowered
  • access to technology
  • societal expectations
  • personal choice
  • leverage
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