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Many students graduate high school and then want to continue their studies overseas. Give the advantages and disadvantages of studying overseas.

The world has drastically changed , and that includes education. Many
students
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 are interested in studying abroad. There is a great deal of information they should know.
This
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 essay will examine the
advantages
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 and disadvantages of studying overseas. There are many
advantages
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 to studying abroad.
First,
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the amazing feeling that will get the
student
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 experiencing a new culture. Living in a new environment will build the
student
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's knowledge and confidence. Culture is a word with many sides. For example, food, lifestyle, and religion.
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amazingly by studying in another country will promote the
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's education. Many
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 have poor universities. By studying abroad, the
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 can choose a university with a high rank.
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, unbelievably , studying in another country will give the
student
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 a new language. Learning a new language will upgrade the
student
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's skills. Usually, many companies will offer two-language speakers a good job.
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 there are
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 , there are
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 some disadvantages.
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surprisingly, homesickness is one of the
huge
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 problems facing
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. Homesickness is the emotional distress caused by being far away from home. Many
students
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 could stop studying and return to their homes from being homesick. Second, culture shock from the problems that any
student
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 may face, especially Arabs, is a huge problem.
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, Kuwaitis, Saudis, and Omanis face severe backlash. Many religious
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 do not have what other
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 have. If any Arab
student
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 travels to America, for example, they will be shocked.
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, sadly, many people are being racist to the
students
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 who arrived from other places. The United Kingdom is one of the most racist
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 for tourists and the national
students
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. Racist people are the most unlikely people ever. In conclusion, it is clear to see that studying abroad has many
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.
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, there are
also
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 some disadvantages.

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task
The task of the essay is not fully done. State a clear view and keep to one side or show both sides with full points.
coherence
Link ideas well. Use simple words to show how ideas connect, for example 'first', 'also', 'but', 'in addition'.
structure
The essay has a plan: intro, body, and conclusion.
content
It talks about both sides of studying abroad and gives some ideas.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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