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In future people may have to live on other planets. Some think that it is therefore important to spend money on researching other planets such as mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is predicted that
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 of
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 ,century
humans
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 have to figure out to live outside of
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 planet
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 rising numbers in pollution and population.
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, some people believe that it is necessary to invest money in researching another planet to survive for
humans
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. I agreed with
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 statement but with some considerations of that.
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 with, as industrialisation is increasing day by day to fulfil the demand of the increasing population, it affecting the
environment
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 negatively by polluting it with the
waste
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 of industries in the air, water and land.
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, a country like Australia drops 100 of tons
waste
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 into the ocean which includes
waste
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 from industries, households,
waste
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 disposal and
waste
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 of medical disposals every year which significantly effecting the marine life of organisms and pollutes water. On the other side of it, the government should spend more money on reusable and clean energy resources
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 as solar panels, and biodegradable disposals, which create more, efficient and clean energy to make the
environment
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 safe and better to live for homo-sapience.
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, more than 50% of air pollution occurs
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 the use of transportation vehicles which generate dangerous gases into the
environment
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 and make it hard for individuals to breathe oxygen from the air.
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, as
humans
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 are failed to control on increasing population of the world, it is important to discover another planet to live on
humans
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,
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, the research should continue to work on it,
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, it is not be ignored to invest in the
environment
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 to protect from crazy demands of developing generations and higher authority should make some strict rules and regulation to abusing the
environment
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