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The maps show the changes of a park from 1980 to now.

The maps show the changes of a park from 1980 to now.
The two diagrams show the
Use synonyms
park
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park's
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 layout and how it has changed between 1980 and the current day.
Overall
Linking Words
, it is evident that the
park
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 has undergone several
development
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developments
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along with
Linking Words
 improvements to its facilities which includes the construction of
new
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a new
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play ground
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playground
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 and bench and some trees. Before the development, the layout of the
park
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 seems very simple and underdeveloped. the most noticeable feature of the
park
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 is
flower
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the flower
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 plants, which is located
both
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on both
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side
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sides
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 of
southern
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the southern
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 gate. on the north side of
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park
Add an article
the park
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, there are some trees.
Also
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 on the south side of
western
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the western
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 gate, there are the pond and
benchs
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benches
bench
. By looking at the second diagram,
it is clear that
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 the current
park
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 layout has been completely redesigned.
a
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A
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 new
roads
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road
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, which is east-west, north-south direction is opened . And flowers are converted into
bush
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bushes
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 and
playground
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playgrounds
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, respectively. on the southern of
trees
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the trees
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, chairs, desks, and barbeque facilities are located.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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