The maps show the changes of a park from 1980 to now.
The two diagrams show the
park
layout and how it has changed between 1980 and the current day.
Change noun form
park's
Overall
, it is evident that the park
has undergone several development
Change to a plural noun
developments
along with
improvements to its facilities which includes the construction of new
Correct article usage
a new
play ground
and bench and some trees.
Before the development, the layout of the Correct your spelling
playground
park
seems very simple and underdeveloped. the most noticeable feature of the park
is flower
plants, which is located Correct article usage
the flower
both
Change preposition
on both
side
of Change to a plural noun
sides
southern
gate. on the north side of Add an article
the southern
park
, there are some trees. Add an article
the park
Also
on the south side of western
gate, there are the pond and Correct article usage
the western
benchs
.
By looking at the second diagram, Correct your spelling
benches
bench
it is clear that
the current park
layout has been completely redesigned. a
new Capitalize word
A
roads
, which is east-west, north-south direction is opened . And flowers are converted into Correct the article-noun agreement
road
bush
and Fix the agreement mistake
bushes
playground
, respectively. on the southern of Fix the agreement mistake
playgrounds
trees
, chairs, desks, and barbeque facilities are located.Correct article usage
the trees
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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