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some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some infomation is too important or too valueable to be shared freely.

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 like business-related,
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 in the field of science and academics is much beneficial and plays a crucial role in one's life.
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 is massively advantageous in the field of research science when it comes to discovering new things.
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, it is helpful to the current youth as sharing more technical knowledge leads to advancement in technologies which propagates nations' growth by producing better products.
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, companies like Apple, tesla makes the masses' lives more convenient and wealthy.
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, some knowledge shared in the academic field may provide better education which leads to a better future for society.
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 , some
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 is too valuable to
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 with the public for free. The main reason is that some scientific
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 takes years to gather by people. I believe no one would like to
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, another reason is that people do not know the purpose of sharing valuable
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 and may misuse it.
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, the public can't imagine important
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 being shared freely with terrorists and they make use of it to threaten the world. In conclusion, It is effective to
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 a certain amount of
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 with the public. Some classified and crucial
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 should not be shared freely.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaboration
  • innovation
  • collective knowledge
  • security risk
  • proprietary information
  • competitive advantage
  • democratization
  • sensitive technology
  • ethical guidelines
  • nondisclosure agreements
  • peer-review processes
  • validated
  • open access
  • regulated access
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