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Some psychologists recommend that it is important to overcome stress by spending time doing nothing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#psychologists #stress #time
I strongly, agree that
by
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spending
time
 doing nothing can reduce stress. As people life is now full
streesful
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stressful
 so it is very important to spend
time
 by doing
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.
Firstly
, if
a
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people will spend hours
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doing
nothings
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nothing
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 will help
there
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their
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mind
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minds
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 to get free from
a
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work
. Groups should spend
there
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their
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 hour alone so that it
give
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 peace to them. Spending
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minutes
miniatures
 alone can help a human to get free from day to day
life style
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lifestyle
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.
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, a man should even go
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 vacation to spend
time
 doing nothing and should live with nature for a
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days. The community can spend days along
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 many ways
such
 as
to go
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 on a
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vacation
 or on a trip.
Secondly
,
a employes
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employes
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 should take
break
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a break
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 from
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their job
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job
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jobs
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 and
office
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offices
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so
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to
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 give space to
a
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body
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bodies
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. Being
along
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 can give pies to
body
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.
According to
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a man should even take
break
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a break
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 from
it
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his
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work place
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workplace
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. Children should be free on
weekend
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weekends
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 by doing
nothings
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nothing
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.
School
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 should give free
time
 to
a
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kids
also
.
Its
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 even important for
a children
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children
a child
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 if they spend
time
 freely.
For example
, If a community take breaks and
then
 he or she
do
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work
then
 it
become
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 easy for him or her to do
work
 more and more fast. In conclusion, from the above
data
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 it is
benefits
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 for a person if he or she
spend
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spends
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time
 freely. I
agree
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 the because from about information spending
time
 for free help a person to develop and
strees
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stress
.
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