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Writing Samples
Band 8

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for your advice on whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/ she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: say why she will not enjoy going to college explain why getting a job is a good idea Suggest the type of job that would be suitable.

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First of all, congratulations on passing high school with
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 an outstanding score. I am really proud of you. As a friend having slightly more experience than you, my personal recommendation is that you take up a job now. One of the major reasons for
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 would be that the college education syllabus covers a vast range
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 subjects, some of which might not be useful to you in future as you have already decided to make a career in the IT Sector,
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, biology. Taking up these subjects won't help you add any value to your profile.
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, you have had a passion for coding ever since I have known you as a child. Getting a job at
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 early age will help you get a headstart and will give you the space to take additional risks where needed. I have a lot of friends working in IT startups in Bangalore, I can ask them to recommend you for a job. Working as an intern at one of these startups would probably be a good plan. I am eager to hear back from you on
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. Maybe we could catch up in person as well. Lots of love, Nihal.

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Try to expand on why coding and early job experience are more beneficial than college education to strengthen the argument.
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Ensure each paragraph focuses on one main point to enhance clarity.
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The letter clearly addresses the friend's query and provides a thoughtful recommendation.
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The letter is well-structured with distinct paragraphs for each point.
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The letter has a friendly and considerate tone, which is suitable for writing to a friend.
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The greeting and closing are appropriate and add a personal touch.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic pressures
  • financial burdens
  • tuition
  • student loans
  • uncertainty
  • work experience
  • earn money
  • practical skills
  • professional network
  • align with interests
  • growth opportunities
  • on-the-job training
  • apprenticeships
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