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What are some of the factors in modern society that causes stress in adults and how we can reduce it?

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Teenagers
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 causing
stress
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 in modern society is becoming more widespread in mant part of the world.
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 essay will examine the factors
as well as
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 solutions could be taken to improve the situations. There are variety of different factor for
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 phenomenon.
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 with, the common problem is presure in studying. A lot of parrent force they children to follow their will, from the university to the jobs they gonna work in the future, every things is in the framework and the bondage, the amount of extra classes need to learn is massive, they
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 expect their child to be "perfection". Beside school knowledge, their
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 make the childs to joining all of the piano courses, football or dance club to improve the skills and soft skills.
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 lead to the mental
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 of many
teenagers
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.
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: Vietnam have received 75% of peoples who causing
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while
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teenagers
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 took 40% of the total in 2022,
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 Vnexpress, one of the most famous news,
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 prove that the situation is true and it can be worse. Another contributing factor to mention is that not only study, but appearance is
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 a factor that causing
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 for
teenagers
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, espcially girls. Example: Nowadays, we can notice that either girls or boys will have a trendy hairstyle, latest clothes and wearing tons of makeup, make them become pretty but fake, they have prejudice that not pretty is the worst thing ever,
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 make them getting mental
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 for buying those
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 product, make hair of even used surgeon to satisfied their will in
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. Despite of these circumtances, there are several of solutions that individuals could take to improve the situations.
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, parent need to stop imposed their childs, letting the daughters/sons to have a conversations about what their dreams and what they want to achieve, the parent can give the child the feedback so both sides have benefits. Example: my mom used to expect that i need to rank at the top of the class, mastered all of the courses that i joined and being the person she expected, but after a conversation with me, she become more understanding and she let me choose whatever i want for my future, sometime, she gives me some feedbacks so that i can improve and be better. The second measurement could be for the prejudice for
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, it is good to be yourselves, makeup and
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 clothes can make people prettier, but not all peoples can afford the money to buy those. Improve yourselves by the basic things, like exercise or studying.
Beauty
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 not only the visual outside but
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 the inside like heart or soul, being care about others, do positive things. So we can be pretty inside out In conclusions, the problems
stress
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 from
teenagers
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 in modern society is unlikely to be entirely eliminated in short term.
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, solutions could be taken to tackle the issue to reduce the effect it is having on the current society.
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