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Some people believe that crime is a result of social problems and poverty, others think that crime is a result of a bad person’s nature. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is claimed that committing an offence can be caused by some factors coming from social issues and
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 others believe that it may be native to negative nature. From my personal perspective, I think that social
problems
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 are certainly the primary cause of crime. On the one hand, there are many reasons why people have a tendency to hold a belief that those who have bad natures can be lawbreakers.
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if someone had some negative qualities
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 as greediness, laziness, or selfishness, they can become would-be criminals because they do not want to work but
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have to lead their lives.
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, they often take part in criminal activities to earn money.
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they are aggressive to everyone to demonstrate their ego or they have had mental illness since they were children.
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, a juvenile delinquent bullying his or her classmates has a tendency to break the law when he or she is older.
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, I believe that social
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 and
poverty
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 play a crucial role in
crimes
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. It can be clearly seen that unemployment can directly cause many
problems
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 in society. Becoming unemployed means that they do not have work to earn enough money in order to meet their basic needs, resulting in minor
crimes
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 as pickpocketing and shoplifting or even serious
crimes
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 like robbery and murder.
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,
poverty
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 makes them lack education and have low self-esteem, which means that no firms want to recruit them.
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, they often think of breaking laws to support themselves and their families. To elucidate, some undeveloped countries
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 as Zimbabwe or Sudan, have witnessed an escalating rate of
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 over recent years. In conclusion, there are many objective reasons
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 as social
problems
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 and
poverty
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 or detrimental person's nature that make people become a lawbreaker.
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, I believe that
poverty
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 and social issues are the main causes because of their heavy impacts on people.
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