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In many different countries, most shops and products become the same. Some people think it is a positive development, while others think it is a negative development. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It’s the era of globalization, we can see that most shops and
products
 become the same in various
countries
.
While
 someone regards
this
 as a positive development, other think it is a negative development.
This
 essay will explore both perspectives and provide my balanced viewpoint in the end. Advocates of the proliferation of similar shops and
products
 across various
countries
 argue the essential role the development may play in enriching the life choices of national consumers. To illustrate, we are driving fancy cars manufactured by Germany, savouring palatable salmon imported from Japan, and enjoying movies produced in Hollywood, without which our life standards would be remarkably weakened standardization facilitates consumers who travel frequently in multiple
countries
. The saturation of international
products
 allows customers to informed choices without any lingua and cultural barriers.Standardized facilitates consumers who travel frequently in multiple
countries
. The saturation of international
products
 allows customers to make informed choices without any linguistic and cultural barriers, owing to their familiarity with the brand names, functions and after-sale services of
products
.By
this
 token, the global sameness of
products
 not only promotes the accessibility of commodities in the domestic market but
also
 ultimately brings tangible boons on a global scale.
However
, retail homogenization, from my own perspective, engenders cultural identity as a country's language, history and culture are inextricably bound up in its local artefacts, be they clothes, footwear or utensils. As international brands penetrate every nook and cranny of society, the striking prevalence of goods from
such
 brands will, in all likelihood, oust the traditional objects of a nation, which would be a disappearance of the richness and diversity of a country's local culture.
Furthermore
, disillusioned with finding the shops and goods identical to those in places they once visited, tourists will find it to be big bea big letdown to travel abroad. In
this
 case, easier access to the same
products
 is more likely to hinder travellers from opening their wallets to buy specialities and souvenirs,
thus
 impeding the blossom tourist industry. To recapitulate with retail homogenization, people are entitled to have easy access to
products
,
whereas
 personally,
such
 a faceless uniformity will occasion a dearth of cultural diversity.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • homogenization
  • globalization
  • identical
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • enhanced competition
  • lower prices
  • cultural diversity
  • limited choices
  • individuality
  • balanced approach
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