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The table illustrates the predicted costing over the next 5 years in American dollars for three environmental projects for sustainable forestry. While the pie chart shows the projectured expenditure breakdown allocation for the only first year as the projects are set up.

The table illustrates the predicted costing over the next 5 years in American dollars for three environmental projects for sustainable forestry. While the pie chart shows the projectured expenditure breakdown allocation for the only first year as the projects are set up.
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The table illustrates the predicted
costing
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 over the next 5 years in American dollars for three environmental projects for sustainable forestry.
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 pie chart shows the
projectured
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projected
 expenditure breakdown allocation for the only first
year
 as the projects are set up.
Overall
,
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only
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 one who going to
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significantly
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 during
next
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 five years. Meanwhile, Salaries on the table will
be take
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the
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 noticeable place with leading 50 per cent in rating. There are West Africa and Central America that in the first 3 years will be dramatically decreasing,
however
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 third
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 are going to increase
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after
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will have a 10 times
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 others. There are Office expenses and Training that have equal numbers expenditure at the pie chart
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 but with the lowest range. Especially, the Set-up costs
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 going to have the average cost.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Projected costing
  • Sustainable forestry
  • Environmental projects
  • Expenditure breakdown
  • Financial commitment
  • Allocation of funds
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Carbon sequestration
  • Deforestation
  • Technological advancements
  • Policy changes
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