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The only reason for people working hard is to earn money. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Human beings
work
 consistently hard in modern life.
According to
 a number of
people
, the reason is that individuals want to get
money
. I partly agree with
this
 view and
this
 essay will discuss whether
people
work
 hard for only
money
 or not. On the one hand,
money
 plays an entirely significant role in working hard.
People
 consistently endeavour to
work
 hard so that they can get not only more
money
 but
also
 high amounts of rewards.
For example
, most companies provide
people
 with special rewards if they
work
 very productively regularly.
Thus
,
people
 try to be hard-working in order to get those rewards.
On the other hand
, there is another important factor associated with being hard-working at the workplace. Some
people
, who have a passion for their job, always try to be hard-working and give their best in their tasks irrespective of expecting any special reward because they want to feel satisfied and confident with the task which they complete successfully.
For instance
, studies have concluded that there is a positive link between feeling self-confident and being successful in a task that requires working hard.
Therefore
, many
people
 give passionately their best in a job in order to achieve a high level of self-confidence. In conclusion, many
people
work
 hard for several reasons. I partly agree with the view that
money
 is an important factor in the level of working hard, and
also
 I believe that a sense of self-confidence and the passion for a job is equally a determinant factor.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Monetary gain
  • Passion-driven
  • Personal fulfillment
  • Career progression
  • Professional development
  • Work-life balance
  • Job satisfaction
  • Societal expectations
  • Cultural values
  • Altruism
  • Positive impact
  • Intrinsic motivation
  • Extrinsic motivation
  • Internal rewards
  • Maslow's hierarchy of needs
  • Psychological aspects
  • Motivational factors
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