There is a disagreement on the impact of increased business and cultures contact between countries on a country’s identity. What is your opinion?

There are widely differing opinions on whether the effect of
business
development
and cultural connection globalization is good or bad
on
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a nation’s
identity
.
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essay will closely scrutinize both viewpoints before concluding that I am in
favor
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of the former, as it has advantages and disadvantages for a
country
's
identity
. On the one hand,
business
development
and cultural connection between countries on a
country
’s uniqueness can be disadvantageous in certain ways and
brings
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a number of drawbacks.
Firstly
, cultural assimilation can occur with transnational economic
development
and cultural infiltration. Increased contact with other cultures can sometimes lead to the dilution or loss of a
country
's unique cultural
identity
. There is a risk that dominant cultures may overpower or marginalize local customs and traditions.
Secondly
,
economic
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dependence of the
country
on foreign enterprises or foreign investment.
This
can lead to the fact that a
country
's autonomy and control over its own resources and decision-making processes may be adversely affected.
On the other hand
, I side with those who claim that global
business
development
and cultural communication have a beneficial effect on the exception of the
country
.
To begin
with, cultural exchange between nations and areas can allow for the exchange of ideas, customs, traditions, and values.
This
can enrich a
country
's cultural landscape and promote diversity, tolerance, and understanding.
Furthermore
, economic growth can increase
business
contact and can lead to economic growth and prosperity.
This
can improve the standard of living for citizens and contribute to a sense of national pride and
identity
.
For instance
, the exchange of ideas
such
as new discoveries, technologies, and artistic expressions with another
country
can make more people aware of the cultural
identity
of the
country
, which in turn enables global citizens to contribute to the clarification sharper and more popular than residents in the past about the national
identity
. In conclusion, some people believe that economic and cultural exchanges are detrimental to national
identity
.
However
, I believe that
this
connection will bring more benefits than harm and the negative effect can be solved when selecting cultures to import and performing
business
development
with foreign countries in a reasonable way.
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